Quibbons Quill

Hello, fading-dream (quite an appropriate name given the end of the story) Ok so I'm gonna be honest, not sure if I liked this or not. It was just really ...

Hey, just a quick review Firstly, it seems like I've said this a lot today, but the piece is just a little to short and also seems totally out of ...

Okey dokey, firsts things first welcome to YWS, I'm very happy to be your first reviewer. I should also say that I don't do grammar, can't review it and don't ...

Hello, Sorry to start on a bad note but I have two problems with pull the Trigger. No 1-The piece is quite short, obviously with it being a tense taster ...

Howsa, He'd tried telling them outright was behind the door. should be He'd tried telling them outright what was behind the door. Well I'm afraid that I haven't read the ...

Holla, looking broke down and pitiful . I think this would work better as "broken and pitiful". Just an idea. all that was left in the was salt Without "the" ...

Hello, Well the other reviews have pretty much said that the story needs more emotion. This is true, a story like this is all about emotion. Most stories are about ...

How do, My main point would be that there needs to be some more emotion put in to the piece. I got the impression that you had deliberately chosen to ...

Hi, a quick review today firstly to be honest, i found the writing a bit stilted. the emotions were kinda told and not shown, which works in some styles but ...

yeah... well... ok.. right. First things first I guess, i liked it, am i to understand that this is a dream you had, or some musing in your head, if ...

Hi, I liked the bit about how asking for there name caused them to leave, it created the comfortable chatty writing tone and was funny. I also think that mix ...

Hi, i like the concept you came up with and you blended the metaphor and action, the small amount there was, really well. The piece made me picture what was ...

First off i have to commend your ambition, to add to shakespeare is brave and i have sympathy with the wish to bring to life scenes which you think about ...

A beautifully written piece and i would agree with the previous critique about both explaining the piece at the beginning, the reader is not stupid and doesn't need to be ...

Ok, wow i didn't have to read that much, i suppose i shouldn't join a writers society if i don't want to read that much. On a first note i ...